Lon Huey posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 11:43am for The First

Well, I was going to say it was a sweet little story..............until I saw your notes. Nothing is as it seems, eh? Jerk the tip and set the hook. Can't wait to see the rest.

noahshonor posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 10:55am for The First

Yes! More please.

DJ posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 8:18am for The First

OK it seemed clear Harry was in a bad spot and flashing back to a good time in his life. When he was traing and met someone who out grew the fat kid thing from when she was a teen and also grew up. Did I miss something? Well I look foward to finding out grate job.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 7:24am for The First

So, you really do have a Harry/Millicent. I'm just glad I posted first. That way I can say I was first when you're the best - er, better - even my reviews need a beta reader.

Seriously though, the dreamweaver made me think this isn't really happening, and then you notes screams it out loud. And of course the "more and less clear" comment makes everything as clear as mud.

Great start to a captivating tale. Cheers!

Bedrup posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 6:27am for The First

Ok. I ´m interested.