Lost and Found Trilogy
Broken Pieces - Part III
By kokopelli
Reviews
Deborahsu posted a comment on Saturday 5th August 2006 5:04am for Broken Pieces - Part III
And they lived happily ever after, with chocolate sauce always in the nightstand ... :-)
Kokopelli replied:
Not, actually. But it did make the trip from the fridge to the bedroom a time or two.
John Conner posted a comment on Saturday 5th August 2006 1:05am for Broken Pieces - Part III
A very nice trilogy. Short and to the point but still very engaging. I'd greatly enjoy seeing what you could do if you turned this into a full size fic as you mentioned in your A/N. I imagine it would be quite entertaining.
Please keep up the excellent work.
Chris1 posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 10:00pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
Great story :)
Chris
CootiePatootie posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 6:58pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
J.C.-
Wellbutrin is wonderful stuff, no? You're lucky it was only 3 years. Mine's lasted 15 so far; the buproprion keeps it at bay (much like Harry).
This exercise in consiseness (is that a word?) was excellent. I enjoy the pairing of Harry/Gaby and you've done it quite well. I must admit, that bottle of chocolate sauce has got me thinking though...
One thing that is probably off many people's radar screens, but I must tell you I feel a teensy bit sorry for the pond scum currently hiding from the two of them. Ok, I lied. I don't feel sorry for them, but I hope the street cleaning team is up to the task.
I really, really enjoyed this.
Cheers; safe travels...
Cassie
Kokopelli replied:
There's a really terriffic battle scene that follows, along with weirdness when Harry and
Gabrielle end up adopting three Veela children, a teenager and a nine-year old pair of twins, which jump-start Harry and Gabrielle getting married, but thats...
ANOTHER STORY.
Lira posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 6:52pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
Oh, brilliant! :D And thanks for being so quick to finish this story. Now I can start my day with a smile! :D
This story definitely is a gem! :D Will certainly rec it to friends!
94caddy posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 5:33pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
Great stuff hope there's more.
KateHC posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 5:20pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
Be safe on your journey.
Fluff is good.
DJ posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 4:08pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
Nice work I think you could easly do a lot with this story line down the road if you want. But I like this as a short and yod did it well there were no holes I could not fill from what you wrote. My only nit pick is there should have bin a kiss.
HermioneGreen posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 3:07pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
A most wonderful story . . . thanks for taking the time to share it with the rest of us
'Mione
Ken Warner posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 2:56pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
I think that I can speak for all of us that we are grateful for accurately prescribed modern pharmaceuticals, and that they make it possible for you to write such wonderful stories.
Thanks so much for sharing.
The human mind is such a wonderfully inventive thing, that it seems to work best when trying to accomplish a task within certain parameters, as you did by creating a novelette from a novel sized idea.
Kokopelli replied:
Actually, I wrote The Letters of Summer when I was clinically depressed - I can write when I'm depressed - it's other things that I can't do.
Jim_xinu posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 2:44pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
I suppose your attempt to pare it down as much as possible explains why it feels rather bare bones. :-)
The background is still impressively solid. But the the foreground, the action of the main characters themselves, the time they spend together is about as small as it can get and still hold together.
I had the idea of Harry going with to help her in the last chapter. The official partners thing I didn't see until Harry spoke to the Superintendent. In part because I assume that in a real law enforcement dept they would discourage relationships between close co-workers, not encourage them.
It's a nice piece that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Gardengirl posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 2:42pm for Broken Pieces - Part III
No chocolate sauce was harmed? Well, why not? How can you say you've done your research if that's the case? *slacker*
Loved this, John. Very cleverly done. For my part, I thank the folks who came up with Zoloft... and so do my children, as I'd be a raving (rhymes with witch) without it!
Kokopelli replied:
Write what you know. I've been married 24 years. We went through a food phase in the early years - enough said about that.
J
Deborahsu posted a comment on Saturday 5th August 2006 5:06am for Broken Pieces - Part III
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