lwj2 posted a comment on Friday 6th March 2020 4:19pm for Stories and Secrets

I enjoyed this, I hope you'll eventually pursue turning it into a longer story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Thursday 25th February 2016 1:08am for Stories and Secrets

Quite the tear jerking addition. Thanks for sharing!

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Thursday 7th May 2009 12:12pm for Stories and Secrets

Damn, but that's cute!

KateHC posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 11:48am for Stories and Secrets

Clare is charming. Her POV is written brilliantly.

DJ posted a comment on Wednesday 29th November 2006 11:40am for Stories and Secrets

Nice follow up.

Patches posted a comment on Wednesday 22nd March 2006 7:36pm for Stories and Secrets

Ilike this format. Clare is a very smart little girl and I like the fact that she can see auras. I'm glad Harry and Tonks got married. This is good. Please continue.

Thanks for writing.
pms

jilumasam posted a comment on Monday 20th March 2006 1:14pm for Stories and Secrets

I originally left you a review in your lj. I've read this pair of "drabbles" again and I enjoyed them much better on the second read through than the first.

I have come to the conclusion that although they could become part of a longer story, they really don't need to.

Lizzy

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Monday 20th March 2006 10:48am for Stories and Secrets

Outstanding, that was really good.

gunny

irile posted a comment on Monday 20th March 2006 1:58am for Stories and Secrets

Hi There

Loved this one, I have to say that it is beautiful. Clarissa seems to be a very bright girl and I liked how you make Harry and Tonks come together. I liked this one better than hero, widow and Orphan.
I also liked that clarissa see colours, or auras, magical auras I suppose. Can she see muggle colours too?.
Good Story

Laura

Manatheron posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 7:39pm for Stories and Secrets

cute

Ken Warner posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 2:13am for Stories and Secrets

You have done a lovely job of a child POV - the way she describes seeing magic so naturally, without any self consciousness, is wonderful.
This very definitely a story I hope your muse picks back up on. Thanks for sharing this start.
Warmest Regards

Pleather Boots posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 8:44pm for Stories and Secrets

Very good! LOL I the kid is cute.

Lostchyld posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 3:43pm for Stories and Secrets

May I insist that this story be written?? 'Tis very interesting-ish.

Cheers.

-The Lost

AzureSky posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 3:38pm for Stories and Secrets

Nice story. Full of fluff :)

Jason Karr posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:41pm for Stories and Secrets

look forward to Dora's reaction to this news

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:32pm for Stories and Secrets

Very nice and a very different PoV. Oh to be a fly on the wall when Clarissa tells Dora what she knows about Dora's condition - esp. since Dora "knows" that it's nearly impossible. *chuckle* Then again, Harry isn't your normal wizard in any other sense, so why should this surprise anyone?

Aberforth's Avatar posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:20pm for Stories and Secrets

I liked this piece very much. I thought you did a wonderful job with Clarissa'a POV. The ratio of assertion to assumption to fact rang very true-to-life, reminding me of overheard snippets from my daughters conversations when they were small.

Also well done was the way you sketched out just enough of the circumstances of the story to allow us to imagine the details of the larger whole.

David Thacker posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 10:35am for Stories and Secrets

Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.

Antosha posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 10:09am for Stories and Secrets

Mmmmmm...

I realize that this was intended to be part of something larger, but it stands alone as a lovely oneshot that manages to be both sad and hopeful. Nice work!

Olafr posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 9:45am for Stories and Secrets

Interesting story. It's often difficult to conceive of how another person sees the world, particularly someone who's special in some way - smart, or has some unusual sense, or something. I like that kind of story because it serves as a useful reminder that everyone sees themselves as normal. I like your use of first person in this story - it's a very natural fit.

Most excellently done, good sir. (The handling reminded me of Emergence, by R. Palmer, a wonderful book that regrettably is over a decade out of print. That, by the way, is a compliment, not an accusation! ...and it's a great pity that Palmer only ever published two books.)

- Olafr.